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You can't elope with Damellon.

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Will you send me the list of people I can't elope with?
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You can't elope with honeydew?
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Joney wrote:I am now so confused

Is Manna a cockney, I thought she was American
unless he is winding me up, Manna told me he came from the East End (not technically a Cockney) and supported the Orient, so it never ocurred to me that he was American.
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Could I inadvertrntly post another "total bastard" compliment?

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For the moment I hold the coveted title of 'total bastard', conferred on me by mickey_one yesterday. I will be happy to relinquish it tomorrow if you have a pressing need for it but allow me a few more hours in the spotlight..
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Manna wrote:You can't elope with honeydew?
you mean she cant elope with a jew, honey?
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damellon wrote:Could I inadvertrntly post another "total bastard" compliment?

Joney
For the moment I hold the coveted title of 'total bastard', conferred on me by mickey_one yesterday. I will be happy to relinquish it tomorrow if you have a pressing need for it but allow me a few more hours in the spotlight..

typical "total bastard" attitude, just bloody typical.

when I read her poem at the Green Note, I will introduce it as a piece written by a total bastard.
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for dessert tonight, I plan to open a Jewish canteloupe :shock: and drizzle some honey in it.
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Manna wrote:for dessert tonight, I plan to open a Jewish canteloupe :shock: and drizzle some honey in it.

it's the honey season. I ate in my sukkah tonight and we had honey on the challah instead of salt.
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Manna wrote:You can't elope with honeydew?
Cant, (find)a loupe hole in the law - it says we're too closely related
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sounds pretty sweet, M.
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mickey_one wrote:
damellon wrote:Could I inadvertrntly post another "total bastard" compliment?

Joney
For the moment I hold the coveted title of 'total bastard', conferred on me by mickey_one yesterday. I will be happy to relinquish it tomorrow if you have a pressing need for it but allow me a few more hours in the spotlight..

typical "total bastard" attitude, just bloody typical.

when I read her poem at the Green Note, I will introduce it as a piece written by a total bastard.

I may sue you
You only have to let the soft animal of your body
love what it loves.

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mickey_one wrote:
Manna wrote:You can't elope with honeydew?
you mean she cant elope with a jew, honey?
A whole other category denied to me. Manna - could you issue badges? Don't want to invest too much time in wasters.
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love what it loves.

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Hey, I said Joney couldn't elope with you. She's the only one. I didn't say you couldn't elope. You may elope with anyone else. Just not Joney. Joney belongs to Mr. McCourt, whose pet name for her is Honeydew. ok?

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ok, this is getting too convoluted, even for me. I need some refreshment.
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Well why didn't you say that?
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love what it loves.

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I'm sorry. I am under the influence of tea, coffee and this album called Colonial Cousins. It's amazing. Forgive me. Forgive me Krishna, forgive me Jesus. I will try to be more clear in the future. Will I ever go clear?
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