Poem XXII by Muddy - Translated by Sandra -

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Sat Mar 04, 2006 7:36 am

I search for a master of your body that is not you.
I search for it erratically, alone and thirsty
And i execute myself in dooms.

As if a body dreaming by itself inside me would live
As if a body dreaming by itself inside you could fit
When?
At every vertigo
of dying only for bodies.
when then
have you made yourself.
Without me
you made yourself
with no place
to me
you made yourself and then.

What, that coming from me, I wait?
What? and I test myself,
With a but over another but
I test myself.

I wrap the night, I undo you by my side
I always play and to what.
The body that I lost
It was made a long time ago
and ignoring you
it made itself alone
And for no one.

All has not been just choosing
Sometimes I think that if I had to choose I would not choose.
But in the meantine, in the meantime what ?

And in the rain
for nothing you live and
knowing you it is nothing, it is not arrive to anywhere arrive to see
that in the rain:

If everything is smoke...

In my steps it is
and everything was as in my steps you were
Maybe without know it at all.

Sandra · Post by **Sandra** » Sun Mar 05, 2006 8:51 pm

and muddy.

Geoffrey · Post by **Geoffrey** » Sun Mar 05, 2006 9:17 pm

muddy wrote:
>I search for a master of your body that is not you . . .
(etc.)

This poem deserves to be put somewhere very special.

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Sun Mar 05, 2006 10:17 pm

what?

Geoffrey · Post by **Geoffrey** » Sun Mar 05, 2006 11:37 pm

muddy wrote:
>what?

I am saying that one doesn't see many poems of this quality.

mickey_one · Post by **mickey_one** » Sun Mar 05, 2006 11:44 pm

Geoffrey wrote:muddy wrote:
>what?

I am saying that one doesn't see many poems of this quality.

this is very unkind of you, Geoffrey. I saw you were in your troll mood from the post to Terry Wogan before. And here, your bait is to be obscure as to whether you are praising or damning. When you are called on it, your deliberate ambiguity will allow you to scuttle away sniggering and pretend innocence.

ok, so you have some attention now as I have replied to you, and others will follow.

meantime, the writer of this piece can only see a muddy response from you.

when I crit. or respond to a poem on this forum I give an honest appraisal, (and, btw, often get slammed by the over-sensitive for my efforts). But I still think that is better than your game-playing.

Geoffrey, can you tell me how many of this forum's contests you have ever entered? Also, how many times have you volunteered to Judge or be an intershammos?

michael

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 2:02 am

well, it definitely gained something with Sandra's translation...

mickey_one · Post by **mickey_one** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 2:25 am

muddy wrote:well, it definitely gained something with Sandra's translation...

explain please. who is Sandra, and does she translate for your poems?

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 4:13 am

she's a member, mickey...

Geoffrey · Post by **Geoffrey** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 9:42 am

Mickey_1 wrote:
>the writer of this piece can only see a muddy response from you.

If the writer entered it into a poetry competition I'm sure it would win first prize - in one of their categories.

>when I crit. or respond to a poem on this forum I give an honest appraisal . . .

Go ahead. I look forward to studying your honesty on this one. I'm sticking a pizza in the oven ready.

>Geoffrey, can you tell me how many of this forum's contests you have ever entered?

I prefer not to enter; it wouldn't be fair on the other participants.

>Also, how many times have you volunteered to Judge . . .

That's your department. I only see the best in people.

mickey_one · Post by **mickey_one** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:17 am

Geoffrey wrote:Mickey_1 wrote:
>the writer of this piece can only see a muddy response from you.

If the writer entered it into a poetry competition I'm sure it would win first prize - in one of their categories.

>when I crit. or respond to a poem on this forum I give an honest appraisal . . .

Go ahead. I look forward to studying your honesty on this one. I'm sticking a pizza in the oven ready.

>Geoffrey, can you tell me how many of this forum's contests you have ever entered?

I prefer not to enter; it wouldn't be fair on the other participants.

>Also, how many times have you volunteered to Judge . . .

That's your department. I only see the best in people.

I was christened mickey_one not mickey_1. It would help if you paid more attention to such details.

You are sure you have spotted a winner here, but which category do you have in mind?

I crit. when I choose to crit. not on demand. I do respond to requests but not from weirdos who prepare pizza before 7 o'clock in the morning.

Good one about not entering! Good one about not judging (except the submissions are anonymous so you judge the writing not the writer).

I seem to have missed your response about volunteering to be an intershammos (btw, context will help you translate the Yiddish, and removes the obvious excuse for not answering). It is a modest, even humble, role and therefor entirely suited to your talents.

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 11:40 am

I don't really care too much if my poem is good or not good, that's something that is beyond myself; I just wrote and that's all ... But there's something I'm sure about it: it's not an excuse for you to argue and bulllshit each other... I thought it could cause some reactions, but I never imagined this kind of reactions.
Sincerely,

Muddy.

mickey_one · Post by **mickey_one** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 12:07 pm

muddy wrote:I don't really care too much if my poem is good or not good, that's something that is beyond myself; I just wrote and that's all ... But there's something I'm sure about it: it's not an excuse for you to argue and bulllshit each other... I thought it could cause some reactions, but I never imagined this kind of reactions.
Sincerely,

Muddy.

Trust me, Muddy, Geoffrey and I don't need an excuse to argue.

It all began years ago when he stole my tuxedo after a lovers' tiff and then posed for a Gallery of Beautiful Losers pic. All the proposals and compliments he subsequently received are by rights really mine.

We have been in correspondence for a long time about both his larceny and his lunacy and our respective lawyers have strived to reach a settlement without success. It seems as if this dispute will only be resolved by a mud-wrestling bout when we meet in Berlin.

Promise not to tell anyone else, Muddy, but it may be that Leonard himself will be willing to referee, apparently he needs the money!

muddy · Post by **muddy** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 12:32 pm

well, it's ok, but I don't care about what happened between you and who's right... I know that the only "replies" to my poem were the ones by you two, and I appreciate it, but, please, don't use my poem as your ring 'cause, although it might be an average poem, I don't think it's fair for it and for me...

Geoffrey · Post by **Geoffrey** » Mon Mar 06, 2006 2:09 pm

muddy wrote:
>I don't really care too much if my poem is good or not good, that's something that is beyond myself

I would tend to agree

>. . . although it might be an average poem

I can assure you it's a long way from being average, Muddy. Believe me.

Poem XXII by Muddy - Translated by Sandra -

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