a breath of an idea, the complete statment in one stanza. i appreciate that. i agree that the occurrence of "antiquity" and "vision" could be reversed. so that the poem ends with a vision. something about the way "stangant walls" and lack of antiquity idea is presented ...

I remember the first time I ever heard (or heard of) Leonard Cohen, in the Artist's studio- The crazy Czech with the absurd blue motorcycle helmet worn indoors who painted in colors so dark and unforgiving that the canvas sucked the light from a room even when well lit - Drew you into it too - The i...

Thanks mickey, I think I'm more of a pleasure poster but your critique is well-informed. This poem was written all at once and as much as i like it as my rememberance of a particular moment, for it to be anything else, or even poetry, I must take care to honor the subject and the flow. I see where y...

I remember the first time I ever heard (or heard of) Leonard Cohen, in the Artist's studio- The crazy Czech with the absurd Blue motorcycle helmet (worn indoors) Who painted in colors so dark and unforgiving They sucked the light from a room Even when well lit - Drew you into it too - The image swal...