hotel room revisited

[jim]

On Staying in the Next Room From Where Leonard Cohen Stayed in a Hotel in Mumbai

Maybe I'll find myself here.
Maybe his cigarette ash
blew onto my balcony.
Leonard in his late sixties.
Me in my early thirties.
It’s a small span of time
in the mirror of history.
A small span of time
to the neighbouring houses.

[lizzytysh]

I like your revisions, Jim... the elements seem consistent now... and the cigarette ash a reasonable consideration.

And now to my long list of already-past-due-intended-things-to-do, I'm highlighting [since it was already on there], to revisit those contest entries that I never commented on.

Thanks for posting this, Jim.


~ Lizzy

[jim]

I just stumbled on this. Probably the final version.


The Next Room

Leonard Cohen stayed
in the next room
of this Bombay hotel.
Maybe his cigarette ash
blew onto my balcony.

[j6ppc]

I think that is good as it stands.

[jim]

THE NEXT ROOM

Leonard Cohen stayed
in the next room
of this Bombay hotel.
Maybe his cigarette ash
blew onto my balcony.
Leonard in his late 60’s,
me in my early 30’s—
a small span of time
in the mirror of history,
a small span of time
to the neighbouring houses