gasoline rainbow

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ilang
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gasoline rainbow

Post by ilang » Sun May 16, 2004 3:08 am

gasoline rainbow

the clouds of stalled darkness
shall blanket my home
my clothes will lie folded
my art fills the walls
the music plays softly
my fish swims alone
a gasoline rainbow
etched on my soul
the sex of my neighbours
heard down the hall
this is my life
and I wish it would grow
to infest this darkness
that blankets my home


peace
ISL
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jmflash
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Post by jmflash » Sun May 16, 2004 6:49 am

I like this poem, and I do not usually like poems. I am also looking at your artwork now and it is quite good.
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Post by Arno » Sun May 16, 2004 11:03 am

I like it too... very athmospheric (is this a word?! :? )

about hearing the sex of your neighbors, I so know what you're talking about :?

cheers
Arno
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Post by lizzytysh » Sun May 16, 2004 4:38 pm

I like it very much, too, ilang. As long as you remove the "h," yes; it is a word, Arno. Or, it's a new word with the "h" left in ~ just let us know what additional layer of meaning the "h" brings :wink: . It really is very atmospheric and unique in its cry for change. I love the title and its implications of tainted happiness.
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Post by Arno » Sun May 16, 2004 5:12 pm

well I was going for How Hugely Himpressive this poem is ;)
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Post by lizzytysh » Sun May 16, 2004 6:46 pm

:lol: Well, hokay, I can haccept that :lol: .
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