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Titanic

Post by George.Wright » Sat Apr 17, 2004 3:37 am

and the silver moon struck
and suddenly, someone would be out of luck
and it struck the lookout's bell on the titanic
and very soon there would be a major panic
and the band played on the sinking deck and it was "Nearer thy God to thee"
and very soon they would meet their maker, under the depth of the savage sea
as the empty boats, they were lowered down
and the icy bodies floated past with a freezingly puzzled frown
how could a ship like this, sink and go down?
and the stern raised itself in some piety
as if in homage to some unlucky diety
and the white vested corpses bobbed past
gentlemen to the last
shipbuilding never learned the lessons of the sea and time
looking fearingly for the heavens and the divine
playing from the good book to the end
human spirit is unnerving and never bends
and the twinkle of a shamed star
does reflect the thoughts of life from afar
and the mysteries of the supernature and of quest
into the drowned minds of sailors, it detests
money it could save the the inhabintants
but only if they had prayed for lent
and the questions go on for the ship of shame
just who do we bloody well blame?

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Post by lizzytysh » Sat Apr 17, 2004 4:49 am

"and the stern raised itself in some piety
as if in homage to some unlucky diety"

"shipbuilding never learned the lessons of the sea and time"

I like a number of lines from this one, but these are perhaps my favourites.
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Post by Vesuvius » Sat Apr 17, 2004 10:12 am

Ciao George!

"Gentlemen to the last"

Yes! I think this is a clue to who you really are!

Another good one George.


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Post by George.Wright » Sat Apr 17, 2004 12:54 pm

Thanks Liz and Ves for your replies.
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Post by lizzytysh » Sat Apr 17, 2004 4:01 pm

Yes, I also liked the "Gentlemen to the last!" line. It reminded me of the musicians who continued playing on the deck until the last, as though abandoning the one thing of beauty left was not an option; and, as though they wanted to continue doing what they loved [until their death] was their priority.
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Post by George.Wright » Sun Apr 18, 2004 2:37 am

The Band played on despite the terrible events unfolding before their eyes
"And the band played on the sinking deck, and it was nearer thy god to thee
And very soon they would meet their maker, under the depths of the savage sea"
and was an act of heroism to the end. It was a pity that the White Star line billed their widows for their uniforms worn that night.
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Post by lizzytysh » Sun Apr 18, 2004 3:32 am

What?!? They surely did not pay, did they???

What is your quote from, Georges? "....under the depths of the savage sea." Are those two lines yours? Very good, if so.
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Post by George.Wright » Sun Apr 18, 2004 4:04 am

My lines Liz and i think the widows had to pay.
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