UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

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UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

Post by Alsiony » Sun Feb 28, 2010 5:53 am

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'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank

'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe

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Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

Post by GinaDCG » Sun Feb 28, 2010 2:12 pm

This is nice. How about a title along the lines of . . . "As yet, Untitled?"
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Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

Post by Cate » Sun Feb 28, 2010 4:18 pm

Hi Alsiony, I enjoyed your poem.
it's a wonderful subject.
And all of us women -
Who are with bellies full of clay
'bellies full of clay' I really like that, such limitless possibilities.
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Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

Post by Alsiony » Wed Mar 03, 2010 3:30 pm

Thanks for your comments guys -

Gina :) I am just hopeless at creating titles! Though I like your suggestion.
I am sure it comes from an underlying (and totally unrealistic) desire to not always want to give things titles or labels - not just with poems and stories, but anything really. I know that probably sounds stupid - but even my own name sometimes, instead of someone calling 'Claire' I would be quite happy with 'Hey' or 'Ugg' :)

Thanks also Cate :)
While I think that we are all born with some basic identity and traits, ofcourse it's mainly all about what happens to the individual that decides what happens not only for them, but within the 'group' overall.
Clay is such a nice sounding word anyways, and a natural substance too, which fitted in with the correspondences I was making overall.
I wanted to get across the idea of possibilities and potential and opportunity. What wonderful and important things they are too.

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'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank

'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe

Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
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Post by Juan Juanders » Thu Mar 04, 2010 4:31 am

Alsiony, I love this. 'bellies full of clay" is superb!
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Re: UNTITLED (Another poem about one aspect of womanhood)

Post by Alsiony » Fri Mar 05, 2010 2:07 am

Thankyou Juan.

I love reading your posts in this section, I deliberately look out for you :D

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'All I know - and you must listen very carefully to this... All I know - is that I know absolutely nothing' - Frank

'Who ever loved that loved not at first sight?' - Christopher Marlowe

Much misunderstood... was the 'Hippie' with a reality fixation...
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