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Reflections

Post by George.Wright » Sat Jan 03, 2004 4:46 am

Looking in the mirror, and you think you see something
Looking in the mirror, and you think you see one thing
Looking in the mirror, and you think you see nothing
and there is no where to go
for their is nothing to show
your self esteem is so low
that there is nothing to reflect
no image for the silver tiles to detect
and you begin to wander and look
for the image that was the spook
and you realised that it was a fluke
that you were born that gender
and looking inside your mind
your destiny you shall find
the woman was just the moneylender
ain't that chrome nice on that fender?
you will reflect what you want to see
and mind and soul shall go free
on the shadow of the new moon and the gorged sea
where the entrance and the litmus test shall be
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Post by Byron » Sat Jan 03, 2004 3:26 pm

Thanks George. Images are all in the mind are they not? Even self-image! That can be the scarey one. I like this one, which is slightly different from your usual style. (which I always enjoy anyway)
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Post by Coco » Sat Jan 03, 2004 3:56 pm

Hi George!


Another good one. I especially liked the surprising line "ain't that chrome nice on that fender". I wasn't expecting it and it made me laugh. :lol: But it was oddly appropriate too. :(

Keep up the good work!
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Post by George.Wright » Sat Jan 03, 2004 8:57 pm

Thanks, Byron and CoCo for your comments. It is a diffrent style of poem for myself, but i like to diversify(if only to stop boredom).
Happy New Year to all of you on the Board.....Georges
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Post by lizzytysh » Sat Jan 03, 2004 9:50 pm

I also enjoyed this one and the working of your words, Georges. Playful, yet serious.
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Post by Ben Kelly » Mon Jan 05, 2004 4:13 pm

George

I liked the variation in the intro, repetition is reputation. It gives you time to reflect and think.

The style makes it easier to read and understand

Nice one

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Post by lizzytysh » Mon Jan 05, 2004 4:55 pm

I also enjoyed the variation in the intro.
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Post by George.Wright » Mon Jan 05, 2004 5:06 pm

Thank you, Ben and Liz for your kind comments. This poem marks a diffrent perspective on my views and therefore a unusual (for me), opening.
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Post by Ben Kelly » Mon Jan 05, 2004 6:50 pm

George

The layout makes entering the spirit of the poem much easier, presentation - the frame only - is at times the essence.

Cheers


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Post by George.Wright » Mon Jan 05, 2004 7:18 pm

But what is behind the frame, Ben?
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Post by Kush » Mon Jan 05, 2004 7:19 pm

One of the features of Qawwali music (ancient music of the Sufi saints) according to Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan (its best known exponent) is "to repeat a word or phrase until all meaning is exhausted from it."
Nusrat's 12-18 minute songs contain frequent repetitions of lines and often single words in different vocal tones, emphasis and inflection.
Apparently LC is also a Nusrat fan.
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Post by Ben Kelly » Mon Jan 05, 2004 7:50 pm

George

There is no content in the frame, but the aesthetic value is greatly increased, and as a sales and marketing tool.

It made me smile.

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Post by Rhodes » Mon Jan 05, 2004 8:18 pm

Coco wrote:Hi George!

I especially liked the surprising line "ain't that chrome nice on that fender". I wasn't expecting it and it made me laugh. :lol: But it was oddly appropriate too. :(
I am not keen on gold finishes on guitars either. :lol: :oops:
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Post by Ben Kelly » Mon Jan 05, 2004 8:25 pm

George

The board seems to be a more friendly place with lots of positive poetical social intercourse going on in the last few days. Except, Avalon - total 6 posts, all negative and mainly about you!

Since none of these charactors write why oh why do they bother?

Cheers

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Post by margaret » Mon Jan 05, 2004 8:38 pm

I thought fender referred to part of a fireplace :oops:

I also liked the line " it was a fluke to be born that gender"
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