There were not that many

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There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:18 pm

There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
were arm in arm with
joy, beauty and charm
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Re: There were not that many

Post by Manna » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:21 pm

they were 3-armed?
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:24 pm

Manna wrote:they were 3-armed?
Makes me wonder too how they managed that .
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:28 pm

There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
somehow managed to bring along with them
joy, beauty and charm


(consider this unfinished)
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:34 pm

There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
had deep in their hearts
charm beauty and joy
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:36 pm

There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
had close to their skin
joy, beauty and charm
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:38 pm

There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
brought close to the edge
of their flesh
joy, beauty and charm
Everything being said to you is true; Imagine of what it is true.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by Violet » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:41 pm

lazariuk wrote:There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
were arm in arm with
joy, beauty and charm

Jack.. I think Manna might have been kidding.. I think this first version works.. maybe add an 'and'...

"joy and beauty and charm"... (now you've kept the nice sound of arm and charm)...

v.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 7:58 pm

Violet wrote: Jack.. I think Manna might have been kidding..
It always serves me well to take everything seriously until I am forced to laugh.

I sometimes feel like a person driving along the road who hears a traffic report of some car going the wrong way on a one way street and calls the station saying "One car? They are all going the wrong way" Who knows? I might be right.

Anyway Violet the whole purpose of the poem was to tell you that I might have been overstating to you when I said that many returned and I got a little distracted by memories.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by Martine » Wed Jun 03, 2009 8:35 pm

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There were not that many
It just seemed that way
because the ones who arrived
had deep in their hearts
charm beauty and joy
Nice.
The Three Graces?
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Re: There were not that many

Post by lazariuk » Wed Jun 03, 2009 8:51 pm

Martine wrote: Nice.
The Three Graces?
Are they not the sisters of Mercy?
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Re: There were not that many

Post by Martine » Wed Jun 03, 2009 10:11 pm

Don't know.
I was thinking of Canova's sculpture of The Three Graces.
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Re: There were not that many

Post by Manna » Thu Jun 04, 2009 2:02 am

is that the one of 3 bottoms?
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