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Relentless

Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 6:59 am
by Alan Alda
It is amazing what three beers (to celebrate a fixed computer) and an exhausted mind will do:

Relentless

The rhyme it decides the idea on each line
becoming the driver and thinker, combine.
The poet needs only to choose auto-pilot
and the message becomes a rhymin' riot
O rhyme! I bow to thine wisdom and wit
if it doesn't make sense, who gives a shit?
And theme? Well, stick to what never varies
Write in that gutter, the one that you married
To keep saying the same olde thing
But letting the rhyme be the driver and sing.
(I'd kill to find an unpredicitable rhyme
snuck past the sleeping poet, some time).

~~~If you are inspired to comment, please do it in rhyme
see how easy you're its slave, (a mere mime).

Re: Relentless

Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:02 pm
by mat james
Yes rhyme is a terrible thing AA.

"When in disgrace with fortune and men's eyes,
I, all alone be-weep my outcast state
and trouble deaf heaven with my bootless crys
and look upon myself and curse my fate" Willy Shake.....

That was Willy writing to Sylvia. ;-)
(on a psychological position that she could relate to)
Of course the strange thing is that I can remember (fairly accurately)the lines, because they rhyme.
As they say, "if you want it to be remembered, make it rhyme"

All good things to you A.A.

Matj

Re: Relentless

Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:37 pm
by Alan Alda
Well, I was referring to the relentlessly bad rhyming poetry of a more near and dear matter...in fact, you wouldn't have to leave this room.

Yes, Mat, Shakespeare was pretty good at it. You got me there.

cheers,
L

Re: Relentless

Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 4:09 pm
by Manna
Howdy Laurie, long time no read
use oldish language correctly, I plead
when you would use mine,
then you can use thine
but if it would instead be my,
then you really must use thy thigh


(I gladly accept all raspberries for this stupid poem.)

Re: Relentless

Posted: Tue Jul 15, 2008 4:48 pm
by Alan Alda
Alas and verily a mis-used 'thine'
in my lovely poem of rhyme
Now I see it shoulda bin 'thy'
written in ink on Mannas' thigh.

:?: 8)

Re: Relentless

Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 12:06 am
by damellon
No need to venture far afield
exhausted PC now is healed
and banished are all Laurie's cares
by three amazing beers
or bears

Re: Relentless

Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 3:40 am
by blonde madonna
This was fun. Enjoy your fixed hardware Laurie. :D

Legless

Here’s my attempt from the rhyming cage
to festoon pretty words around my rage.
I do not dare to say what I mean
but allude to the obscure, hint at the obscene.
Spout anger and hate but hide behind art
where mother is whore and lover is tart.
Feel safe in knowing that my nasty baubles
expose only your own weakness and foibles.
Send you fruitlessly searching for deeper water,
something symbolic in the image of slaughter
and in the end claim that I ape the uncouth
to expose and reveal its kernel of truth.
Here’s to you as I take another stiff drink,
I am too smashed to care what you might think.

BM, no poet and now I show it 8)

Re: Relentless

Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 4:16 am
by Alan Alda
Bears? I had two on Saturday 'round noon
Stuff of my nightmares near my living room
And "Legless" what can I say? ( I'm stumped !)
your keen perception of subjects clumped
into faux art (say that Real Fast!)
turned into a rhyming poem that'll last
longer than the symbolic tirade
of pointless points and circles made.
What was I saying? The rhyme it took over
my mind just like a cold, dark lover.

salute!
L

Re: Relentless

Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 4:58 am
by mat james
(I'd kill to find an unpredicitable rhyme
snuck past the sleeping poet, some time).
On spelling and rhyme and efforts on meaning;
Hey L ! What is this “unpre-di-citable”?
Is the author deceived into believing
that the poem is somehow “re-citable”?
8)
Matj

Re: Relentless

Posted: Wed Jul 16, 2008 4:27 pm
by Alan Alda
Spelling, I'm much better than that
Three-beer-typo is the name of that cat
Deception would mean the poet was trying
But, alas, the poem/poet is merely complying.
Like that olde cliche: shooting fish in a barrel
The Rhyme knows who it can use without peril.