Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Alsiony » Mon May 10, 2010 2:14 am

Harry S wrote:
karrenb wrote:What was it you wanted to do with the moon?

I didn't quite get the underlying meaning of your lovely poem.

Maybe you would like to explain it in more detail next time.

Karren x

Fuck the moon
And its indecision (waxing and waning)
And cream cheese beyond its sell-by date (moon made out of cream cheese)
And its selective romance (its everything if your luck is in, its a lamppost if not)
And its cloud disguise (obvious)
Fuck the moon
And its illegitimate sun (pun son)
And its yellow fever (obvious)
And its boast of stardom (star pun)
Fuck the moon
The golden boy of the Universe (obvious)
And its broken imitation of an egg (break it, fry it, yellow and round)
Panned by its critics (it's a pan pun upon)
Well, it isn't a lie to say that this is sometimes how it can feel - but the question is - how much of the time?

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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Cate » Mon May 10, 2010 2:34 am

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I like it Harry, especially this line And its selective romance (its everything if your luck is in, its a lamppost if not)
I like the added lamppost analogy as well.


(edited to remove odd pretend yelling at the moon)
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by kwills » Mon May 10, 2010 3:53 pm

Violet wrote:.. kwills.. come over here this instant!.. [I feel like spanking those little baby cheeks.. and I think you know which ones].. [you bad bad baby boyirl!]..


note: "boyirl" refers to a Turning Ugly Losers Poetry by Forum Members' section, uh, member who refuses to own his/her gender identity.. when just little babies.. boyirls can be berry berry cute.. [berrry!]..
Gee violet I only said I liked your poem!I can't remember why I was laughing though,but then I had had too much bottles of milk to drink celebrating Chelsea's Premiership title! :D
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by kwills » Mon May 10, 2010 4:00 pm

I was mooned
By the full moon,
And I swooned
Under the moon
As my reason
Took flight
In the eerie
Moonlight.
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Violet » Mon May 10, 2010 5:20 pm

kwills wrote:
Violet wrote:.. kwills.. come over here this instant!.. [I feel like spanking those little baby cheeks.. and I think you know which ones].. [you bad bad baby boyirl!]..


note: "boyirl" refers to a Turning Ugly Losers Poetry by Forum Members' section, uh, member who refuses to own his/her gender identity.. when just little babies.. boyirls can be berry berry cute.. [berrry!]..
Gee violet I only said I liked your poem!I can't remember why I was laughing though,but then I had had too much bottles of milk to drink celebrating Chelsea's Premiership title! :D
.. oh.. I thought you were suggesting another sort of Geof-- oh, never mind..

... [congrats on the title!].. [you must have a great big baby hangover!]


.. now, kwills.. given your inexperience in, well, let's face it, everything.. I shall help you with your poem, or "pome," as his Lordship prefers..

kwills wrote:I was mooned
By the full moon,

And I swooned
Under the moon
As my reason
Took flight
In the eerie
Moonlight.
.. now, this [above] is the "theme" of your pome -- and a good [quite funny] theme it is too..
kwills wrote:I was mooned
By the full moon,
And I swooned
having been so mooned
[Under the moon]
[As my reason
Took flight
In the eerie
Moonlight.]
.. as you see, I'm developing your theme, baby kwills..
kwills wrote:I was mooned
By the full moon,
And I swooned
having been so mooned
As my reason
got lampooned
[Took flight
In the eerie
Moonlight.]
.. lampooned: okay, in addition to meaning to ridicule [which it seems is what happened to your "reason"].. it can also mean a written attack, also ridiculing a person [according to my online dictionary]..

.. and so..

kwills wrote:I was mooned
by the full moon,
And I swooned
(having been so mooned)
As my reason
got lampooned
(and it was all over
the place the next day
in the Sun)..
.. viola!..

.. [that's ta da, in violet talk]..

.. [luckily, I have reason to know about that Brit rag, the Sun].. Okay, kwills.. that's our collaborative pome, then.. oh, and nice about the moon and the Sun.. [following up on one of his Lorship's themes]..

.. now, we'll need to reconvene on another thread, perhaps, re: this Henning/Dangermouse business.. meantime, find out what you can on Jarkko.. he's a funny one, methinks.. [find out something about his obsession with red ink.. that could be illuminating.. or, well, at least coming from you]..


Okay, over and out,
your MI6 boss/sometimes schoolmarm/mother-figure,
Violet "M" Peabody VIII]..


edit: I can't believe I called Dangermouse Monstermouse.. my comics deficiency is rearing its ugly head once again..
.. last edit: I keep writing schoolmarm as two words, for some reason..
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by kwills » Mon May 10, 2010 7:26 pm

Oh! well at least I got to keep three lines! :lol:
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Cate » Mon May 10, 2010 9:17 pm

I also love all of these fun new moon poems.

Violet I like your moon song - is the shape intentional? the middle looks like the cut out of a moon

Welcome to the new cartoon character poet who seems to enjoy writing rhyming poems about aliens... something about you seems strangely familiar.

Kwils - the moon mooned you - how rude. Did you moon him back?
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Violet » Mon May 10, 2010 9:57 pm

Cate wrote: Violet I like your moon song - is the shape intentional? the middle looks like the cut out of a moon
.. interesting.. hadn't noticed that until you pointed it out.. maybe I could enhance that more, as it looks like there could be two such moon shapes, with a little adjusting..

.. the opposite of the sun, the moon connects to the unconscious.. and so it's nice you're pointing out something that was unconsciously rendered on my part.. the moon is also the feminine to the sun's masculine.. [and so his Lordship's endearing refrain: Fuck the Moon.. is very apropos]..

.. oh, by the way, kwills might take some time to respond, Cate.. [you can't know a real hangover until you've had one from too much milk!]..

.. okay, well.. still stuck on the moon, it seems.. [however, I'm thinking of developing a monastic nun theme next.. so I do believe I'm making progress]..
v i o l e t xxx x
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Violet » Mon May 10, 2010 11:30 pm

kwills wrote:Oh! well at least I got to keep three lines! :lol:
.. you know, give your size, kwills, three lines is proportionately quite a lot, so I'd quit while you're ahead if I were you..

.. [oh, and if you don't stop that obnoxious laughing, I will take you over my knee!]..

V.M. [xx]
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Cate » Mon May 10, 2010 11:42 pm

Violet wrote:
.. interesting.. hadn't noticed that until you pointed it out.. maybe I could enhance that more, as it looks like there could be two such moon shapes, with a little adjusting..

.. the opposite of the sun, the moon connects to the unconscious.. and so it's nice you're pointing out something that was unconsciously rendered on my part.. the moon is also the feminine to the sun's masculine.. [and so his Lordship's endearing refrain: Fuck the Moon.. is very apropos]..

.. oh, by the way, kwills might take some time to respond, Cate.. [you can't know a real hangover until you've had one from too much milk!]..

.. okay, well.. still stuck on the moon, it seems.. [however, I'm thinking of developing a monastic nun theme next.. so I do believe I'm making progress]..
v i o l e t xxx x
Nuns - I've always been fascinated by nuns and priests - well more nuns but then I wanted to be one when I was a little girl.

Interesting power/relationship dynamics between the earth/moon/sun. The moon circles the Earth, taking care of the tides and helping with weather yet Earth barely notices as she's so focused on the sun and circling it. Every so often the moon gets sick of this and slowly starts to move away from the Earth, but then as the distance grows s/he decides against it and rushes back to her again.
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Cate » Mon May 10, 2010 11:53 pm

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Note from a tub

It's true. I want to hear about the moon
and the stars, how you think about me
in the dark. I'm biologically programmed for this,
for you. Your is scent is still crawling through
my brain that's busy imagining how your hands
once touched my feet. How they slid over
my skin, how your fingers tasted of lotion.

How soft your kisses were, how gentle
your tongue. Still my body resents my mouth
for saying, "here is our stop,
this is as far as we may travel".



ohhh crap - just looking through this thread and I think I ripped of a piece of "where the wild things are" by Maurice Sendak ... have removed the line "Of when we journeyed through the morning/and afternoon into the dark."
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Violet » Tue May 25, 2010 6:14 am

.. pssssst.. Cate.. I'm still in the country, and the moon tonight.. well, it's incredibly, just incredibly bright..

... I just can't decide, though.. whether it's everything.. or just a lamp post.
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Cate » Tue May 25, 2010 6:19 am

it's both Violet, it's both but let's pretend for now that it's everything.
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by Violet » Tue May 25, 2010 6:26 am

.. oh, okay..

... good night, Cate.. good night, moon.. moon bright..

.... (my everything tonight)..
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Re: Everybody has to write at least one poem about the moon

Post by daka » Wed Jun 02, 2010 12:01 pm

THE MOON IS MINE

the moon is mine
i was there first
my name is sam
uncle of man
saviour of earth
and quencher of thirst

sean
If you become the ocean you will not become seasick....Jikan (aka Leonard Cohen)

It's comin' from the feel that this ain't exactly real, or it's real, but it ain't exactly there! . Jikan
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