Geoffrey ate my rabbit

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Geoffrey ate my rabbit

Postby Sideways » Tue Jan 05, 2016 7:50 am

I'm here to sign please
For a refresher course
Of my heart


Then start with these please
Your name on these broken lines
Left from broken times that passed
Just part of your heart
A bare part start

Bear with me please
These half hearted part starts
Do I seize your pleas
Do you think that's smart?

I came to sign
A novice move
No autographs
Of a starry past
I'm slow not fast
No feast repast
It's a fast
Starved past


I'm here to sign please
A refresher course for my heart
Amuse Bouche to start
Main course coming last


Then finally after last
Let's drink my past
It's toast
And toast the cast
Last edited by Sideways on Tue Jan 12, 2016 11:17 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Geoffrey » Tue Jan 05, 2016 11:20 pm

[quote="Sideways"]I'm here to sign please . . .[quote]

hello. it has come to my attention that despite being on display for quite a long period of time, this poem has aroused zero interest. nobody cares to comment because it moves them not, pumps no air into the tyres of their imaginations. allow me therefore to open my first aid box and stop your enthusiasm from silently bleeding to death like a leaking pen.

love the words with three syllables ('refresher', 'autographs' and 'finally') - very encouraging, even if less articulately written than one might have preferred. i view them as a trio of lego bricks, foundation stones upon which could be built a small construction eventually resembling an acceptable poem. poetry is best when illustrative language is implemented, when unpredictable metaphor transports the reader through an exhilarating landscape of hills and vales, through a fairground of mercurial twists and turns, dizzy carousels, breathtaking helter skelters. a territory where the thirsty reader surrenders to the writer's passion as if a pilgrim drinking from the holy chalice. a skilled author is at his most riveting when standing defenceless, emotionally exposed and vulnerable. so put no fences or warning signs around the quicksand. don't let pride strangle the embryo of a poem before it has chance to fill its lungs with a scream that could deafen the midwife's ears. stop visiting porn sites, spending your entire lifetime clicking away those livejasmin adverts; instead, take a watering can to that desert you call a brain, read spiritually enriching literature such as dostoyevsky, kafka, beckett or sartre. in my case being a genius at everything i attempt comes naturally, and that is not boastful egocentricity. arrogance or big-headedness was never a part of my nature - i was simply fortunate to inherit genes from a supremely creative lineage. i merely say that one should not be deterred by humble beginnings, because a little hard work can maximise one's potential. you may not become the architect of a spectacular cathedral in the heart of london, like my illustrious ancestor, but neither should you be satisfied with a mud hut slapped together in an african village like kunta kinte.
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Re: Geoffrey ate my hamster

Postby Sideways » Wed Jan 06, 2016 12:43 am

Geoffers, yours is a long-winded aimless kunta kinte post really, and yet I feel it may well bring satisfaction to its target audience of one. Enjoy it for a while then move on to something of more value, perhaps learning to write in a less laboured, clunkily constructed manner. Obviously do not take that as, in any way, critical. If I can help you find an authentic voice let me know. Don't be shy or too much in awe to approach me. Remember, my Illustrious ancestors built the employment exchange in the heart of London so I feel I can assist you to find a decent part-time position, or at least achieve that elusive first Round One interview.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Cate » Wed Jan 06, 2016 5:15 am

I've said something similar before but what I like best is, that despite the fun word play (and what I've caught is very good), the feeling of a craving for something/someone lost is not lost.

It reminds me of the feeling from the song 'did I ever love you'.

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I just saw a commercial tonight in which Mr and Mrs Potato Head were tucked in a closet eating potato chips. why would they do that? That's messed up.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Geoffrey » Wed Jan 06, 2016 10:52 am

Sideways wrote:Geoffers, yours is a long-winded aimless kunta kinte post really, and yet I feel it may well bring satisfaction to its target audience of one. Enjoy it for a while then move on to something of more value, perhaps learning to write in a less laboured, clunkily constructed manner.
i expected my post to be negated, as surprise is not an abundant ingredient amongst the plain and predictable efforts found in this section. any response slightly more advanced than a simple 'awesome!' would appear clunky in here, a place where pearls are trampled beneath pigs' trotters - would it not? instead of criticising my contribution, a little 'thank you' would be more appropriate. your poem has now received several replies, and the number of hits significantly higher than before i entered the arena.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Artsinlife » Wed Jan 06, 2016 3:54 pm

Interesting to read, nice playing with words :)
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Geoffrey » Thu Jan 07, 2016 12:07 pm

Artsinlife wrote:Interesting to read, nice playing with words :)
hi lucy. very encouraging to know you are still around. yes, playing with words is like playing with coloured strips of plasticine. they can be mixed together and molded into all sorts of exciting creations. words have more power, though - much more. you can seduce somebody with them, or dish out a verbal whipping. john's gospel opens by telling us that everything that exists today began with a single word, but then again he was no einstein - if you know what i mean. without words, however, one's mental representation of an object is incomplete. also, one can estimate a person's IQ from the way they communicate. one short sentence, for example, is usually enough for me to judge whether or not the author is an utter moron or a clever bastard.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Artsinlife » Thu Jan 07, 2016 12:53 pm

Hi Geoffrey, yes, still here :-) Though I don't know how to understand your last sentence; sometimes short comments are quite enough as I think poetry doesn't need long comments, as its beauty lies in lots of ways of its interpretation by each individual. And, yes, words have strong power - they are abstract in fact, but can express very much.
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Geoffrey » Thu Jan 07, 2016 11:04 pm

Artsinlife wrote:
>sometimes short comments are quite enough as I think poetry doesn't need long comments

well, using today's standard, a lengthy comment might be any response longer than two or three words. a positive response is usually limited to 'brill', 'wow', 'great' and 'awesome'. a poem written by a person with a modicum of talent is most often ignored, because it simply is not understood by those who normally comment. i never post my poetry here for precisely that reason; it would be like putting a stradivarius violin into the hands of a neanderthal man.
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Re: Geoffrey ate my sandwiches when I turned away for 30 seconds

Postby Sideways » Fri Jan 08, 2016 9:51 am

Posted by Geoffrey, as "Snow" in the old newgroup. The time of his post was February 14th 1992.

Valentine Greeting to Leonard

I, Snow, have a way to know
you, rest of the World, have a way to go.
I shine whilst you slumber
I dream of cucumber
and a Writer writes
and a Singer he sing
so much joy
to this Group
I have to bring.

My role
is to educate and thrill
your roll
has cheese and tomato to fill


Peace and Love to all my many followers

G
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Artsinlife » Fri Jan 08, 2016 12:04 pm

Geoffrey wrote:Artsinlife wrote:
>sometimes short comments are quite enough as I think poetry doesn't need long comments

well, using today's standard, a lengthy comment might be any response longer than two or three words. a positive response is usually limited to 'brill', 'wow', 'great' and 'awesome'. a poem written by a person with a modicum of talent is most often ignored, because it simply is not understood by those who normally comment. i never post my poetry here for precisely that reason; it would be like putting a stradivarius violin into the hands of a neanderthal man.
And that's a pity, your work might be interesting and we would like to read them. :) I still believe that there are people who enjoy reading poems here, but they simply feel uncomfortable to express it publicly. I have posted only two works up to now, got almost no comments, but find it OK, as long as somebody enjoys it, though without a response.
I also use comments like Awesome here, but not because I am lazy to write more, but just because I don't feel like I need to write longer analysis to it.:-) But probably I should, as I could be otherwise included to the group of neanderthalers. :D :D
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Artsinlife » Fri Jan 08, 2016 1:17 pm

Artsinlife wrote:
Geoffrey wrote:Artsinlife wrote:
>sometimes short comments are quite enough as I think poetry doesn't need long comments

well, using today's standard, a lengthy comment might be any response longer than two or three words. a positive response is usually limited to 'brill', 'wow', 'great' and 'awesome'. a poem written by a person with a modicum of talent is most often ignored, because it simply is not understood by those who normally comment. i never post my poetry here for precisely that reason; it would be like putting a stradivarius violin into the hands of a neanderthal man.
And that's a pity, your work might be interesting and we would like to read them. :) I still believe that there are people who enjoy reading poems here, but they simply feel uncomfortable to express it publicly. I have only posted two works up to now, got almost no comments, but find it OK, as long as somebody enjoys it, though without a response.
I also use comments like Awesome here, but not because I am lazy to write more, but just because I don't feel like I need to write longer analysis to it.:-) But probably I should, as I could be otherwise included to the group of neanderthalers. :D :D
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Re: Geoffrey ate my 2 bedroom flat

Postby Sideways » Sat Jan 09, 2016 10:31 pm

Sideways wrote:Posted by Geoffrey, as "Snow" in the old newgroup. The time of his post was February 14th 1992.

Valentine Greeting to Leonard

I, Snow, have a way to know
you, rest of the World, have a way to go.
I shine whilst you slumber
I dream of cucumber
and a Writer writes
and a Singer he sing
so much joy
to this Group
I have to bring.

My role
is to educate and thrill
your roll
has cheese and tomato to fill


Peace and Love to all my many followers

G


Geoffrey, I don't think that I ever commented on this poem when you first posted it. I apologise. Now, 24 years later, I appreciate all its hidden messages. Well done!
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Re: A poem of longing by Sideways Sue

Postby Geoffrey » Sun Jan 10, 2016 9:51 pm

Artsinlife wrote:And that's a pity, your work might be interesting and we would like to read them. :) I still believe that there are people who enjoy reading poems here, but they simply feel uncomfortable to express it publicly. I have posted only two works up to now, got almost no comments, but find it OK, as long as somebody enjoys it, though without a response.
I also use comments like Awesome here, but not because I am lazy to write more, but just because I don't feel like I need to write longer analysis to it.:-) But probably I should, as I could be otherwise included to the group of neanderthalers. :D :D
thank you, my dear, for writing. don't worry about receiving "almost no comments" to your works, as that is likely a sign that they are beyond the resident readers' ability to understand their poetic value. this is not a brains trust, merely a forum for fans, people who follow an idol; they are not the intelligentsia - if you get my gist. the reason i am here is to occasionally remind them of their station, stick a little hatpin into a cheek on their backsides. this little poem i call: "the hammer of dawn fruitlessly bangs on the eyelids of a corpse".

after the act
she cut my name
into the bark
under yours

it was felled
after she wed
by some fool
sick with envy

tell your wife
she can relax
as i am cured
of name dropping
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Re: Geoffrey ate my metal 8 rung ladder

Postby Sideways » Mon Jan 11, 2016 1:02 am

Thanks for your tribute to the great Johnny Dowd

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FB1mm25LGwg
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