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Who Am I

Postby elazar on Wed Jan 25, 2012 8:54 am

Who Am I

waking up to cold remorse
stiff movements chart the coarse
effort met halfway
broken strides bury the day

swept forward in midst of the swarm
reflective suggestive a common norm

I fear most before I die
I'll blink and say who am I

Salut
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Re: Who Am I

Postby fishfishquaileye on Wed Jan 25, 2012 10:00 am

You are a "common Norm". Do I win?
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Re: Who Am I

Postby elazar on Wed Jan 25, 2012 4:47 pm

Yes. Select your prize
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Re: Who Am I

Postby fishfishquaileye on Sat Feb 04, 2012 2:59 am

elazar wrote:Yes. Select your prize




Norm! Cheers!
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Re: Who Am I

Postby elazar on Wed Feb 22, 2012 8:08 pm

fishfishquaileye wrote: Norm! Cheers!


So Brave! So Sweet!
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Re: Who Am I

Postby Dennis Dwight Baker on Fri Feb 24, 2012 4:48 pm

"I" is attached to reason/individual as "I AM" is attached to spirit/faith.

Who "AM I" and Who "I AM" walk together.
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Re: Who Am I

Postby elazar on Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:05 pm

Interesting, Dennis... sounds like the "perfect" balance I've been searching for all this time! Well done!
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Re: Who Am I

Postby lizzytysh on Thu Mar 01, 2012 4:03 pm

"I" is attached to reason/individual as "I AM" is attached to spirit/faith.

Who "AM I" and Who "I AM" walk together.

A simple and concise reduction. I really enjoyed that, and especially conjunct elazar's poem.
"Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken."
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