complete the poem.....(Haiku)
Sandra abandoning us to our [i]own [/i]first line.
Wull, uh, that's what yuh said "teach' "..... Even though you've released us, I'm tempted to just still keep going, but won't burden you with my results.
That was fun. Thanks for your compliment. Of course! ~ the first would be the best. I like it best, too, actually. Now comes the hardest part, thinking of our own first line.
~Lizzytysh
Edit: I almost got out of bed last night, to return to the computer and go through the whole start-up process, just so I could add another one having to do with guardian angels, realizing that the ones I'd done were not of the "air." I commanded myself, "Don't even think about...stay right where you're at!" ~ and did, drifting off soon thereafter. It's just one of those areas where I love the rhythm/syncopation/thought process behind it, and it just feels good to do them. Whether they're truly correct, officially, is a whole other matter....but at least beginning is beginning, and if it's not at least somewhat pleasurable, one might abandon it altogether.
That was fun. Thanks for your compliment. Of course! ~ the first would be the best. I like it best, too, actually. Now comes the hardest part, thinking of our own first line.
~Lizzytysh
Edit: I almost got out of bed last night, to return to the computer and go through the whole start-up process, just so I could add another one having to do with guardian angels, realizing that the ones I'd done were not of the "air." I commanded myself, "Don't even think about...stay right where you're at!" ~ and did, drifting off soon thereafter. It's just one of those areas where I love the rhythm/syncopation/thought process behind it, and it just feels good to do them. Whether they're truly correct, officially, is a whole other matter....but at least beginning is beginning, and if it's not at least somewhat pleasurable, one might abandon it altogether.
Last edited by lizzytysh on Tue Jul 23, 2002 4:15 am, edited 2 times in total.
Thank you Lizzytysh....but that little haiku (if it is legitimately one) was in fact blatantly inspired by a quote from a meteorologist who studied changes in weather patterns and chaos theory and then famously declared that "when a butterfly flaps its wings in china it initiates a chain of events that sets off a tornado in Texas."
So you see where that is coming from.....that meterologist (I forget his name) should have been a poet.
So you see where that is coming from.....that meterologist (I forget his name) should have been a poet.
That's funny, Kush. I'll read it again with that in mind. However, guaranteed, that meteorologist would never have dreamed to put it into a Haiku, or that it would ever have ended up in one. Too bad you can't track him down and mail him a copy. Shows you were impressed with his theory....on some level at least. It's actually reminiscent of what I heard on NPR the other day about the airstream/dust/wind flow patterns being such that within some incredibly short period of time [maybe two months?] we here in the U.S. will have breathed the very same air that those on the other side of the world breathed first, and vice versa. The clouds that carry bacteria, etc. were also part of that discussion. What a concept on the butterfly/tornado. Have you considered using tornado in your last line to make the link even more direct with his theory? I linked it to Leonard's poem regarding the dog barking [in China?] At least the information [itself] that you used remains very original.
~Lizzytysh
~Lizzytysh
George.Wright wrote:Your in the daylight
and space is out of sight
and so is the darkness of the night
and the second sight
and the wrong from right
and the godhead to bite
and the woman's right
and the sorrow's so bright
and the right to be a knight
and the Guinivered beds
and the crack to be fed
and a merry dance to be lead
and the right to be red
and the hymns and prayers said
and the whole fucking's things read
you cannot turn gold to lead
you will instead fuck up your head
and the four poster's practically flayed
you must disappear into the night...........................
georges
i dont care what the others think of this, i like it.
me too !! George - I think there is madness in your methods and method in your madness....and I like both qualities in writing, atleast to my untrained poetic sensibilities.
Last edited by Kush on Wed Jul 24, 2002 2:04 am, edited 2 times in total.
Lizzytysh.....I wanted to keep it general 'a raging storm' rather than specific ' a tornado'.
Well, no....the truth is I thought the original quote was ' a storm in philadelpia' and then when I checked it was ' a tornado in Texas'. And it was not a butterfly in china..it was in Brazil. well,,,there have been many corruptions of what was originally said...
Well, no....the truth is I thought the original quote was ' a storm in philadelpia' and then when I checked it was ' a tornado in Texas'. And it was not a butterfly in china..it was in Brazil. well,,,there have been many corruptions of what was originally said...