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by KRTEK on Tue Jan 07, 2003 3:45 pm
she said
I hate you when you do that
I said
different people hate many different things
so she fell around my neck
then she fell to the floor
then I fell in love for the little creature
tortured by our own hatered on the floor
I said
I love you when you do that
she said
different people love many different things
At the end we laughed about it all.
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by elazar on Thu Jan 09, 2003 10:48 am
krtek,
this sounds like a true story,and i hope it was.regardless,great poem.
salute,
elazar
breath deep and live
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by lizzytysh on Thu Jan 09, 2003 9:04 pm
What original and delightful twistings and turnings of concepts, words, and images. It really becomes one that you want to analyze by its every word to see exactly what has just happened there, with the way you wrote it, to make it be what it is.
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