The sex is good too

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The sex is good too

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And the sex is good too

Met this girl
Artist
sculptor, writer, designer
Vinyl records playing
She makes us coffee

We share poems, music & lyrics
Talk about tragedies
Talk about recovery from tragedies
We smile
We're the same

Can't get enough
3 hour drives through the week
For coffee
And to talk about poets, music & writers
We talk about
tragedies & recovery from tragedies

Although our friendship is new
Our conversations have always been the same
About music, lyrics & poems
About tragedies & recovery from tragedies

She makes us coffee
We sit at the kitchen table
"Suzanne" is playing on the record player
We smile

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I love it - it's honest, open; it's brilliant.

Seeya Gull. I gotta go for a bit... be good ;)
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I felt it was my duty to cleanse the "poem" of this thread.


And the sex is bad too, so very bad

I met this girl
She was an house painter
sheep, fighter, I-liner
broken records playing
She makes us some toffee

We share joints, moustaches & horlicks
Talk about poetry
Talk about recovery from terrible poetry
Wee smile
We're insane

Can't get any sex at all
3 hour dives through the weak
For toffee
And to talk about poets, music & writers
We talk about
Poetry & recovery from terrible poetry

Although our friend is nude
Our conservations have always been of the drain
About music, lyrics & poems
About poetry & recovery from terrible poetry

She makes us toffee
We sit at the horsey stable
Suzanne is playing with a baseball player
Wee smile
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Boss wrote: Tue Apr 04, 2017 3:50 pm I love it - it's honest, open; it's brilliant.

Seeya Gull. I gotta go for a bit... be good ;)

Comedy Gold! Great post.
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Hi
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I can help you. My reaction was entirely about the writing quality. I didn't even take in about the sex as I was too offended by the writing.
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Boss,
I suspect solongleonard is upset I didn't mention painters as artists. And besides anyone that knows me knows I do not like toffee & haven't smoked a joint in 12 years and when I did smoke I never shared.
Have a good Easter Boss,
Gully

Solongleonerd,
Pictures of the sex are soon to come.
Smh,
Gully
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Who we are.
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Muhammed Ali could paint better than you even with his gloves on.

And he was a much better writer than you


Let us compare mysogonys

THE FIRST CONTESTANT

Gullyble wrote

"Met this girl
Artist
sculptor, writer, designer
Vinyl records playing
She makes us coffee"



THE SECOND CONTESTANT

Ali wrote

"'Will they ever have another fighter who writes poems, predicts rounds, beats everybody, makes people laugh, makes people cry, and is as tall and extra pretty as me?'


LADIES AND GENTLEMEN WE HAVE A UNANIMOUS DECISION

In this poetry contest Gullyble is straining in his writing. His piece is jerky, and starting with "met" is awful, a rookie error. It is lacking in all confidence. It is so try-hard. "She makes us coffee". So what if she does? Is that meant to be interesting. Do you think it is charming or enigmatic? It is not poignant. Do you really think adding in this sort of constructed whimsy is poignant?

By contrast Ali has rhythm and confidence. A true poet. He handed you a whuppin', Boy, and it is now up to you, and also down to you, to learn from your defeat.

And then we come to Gullyble's famous fighting talk. I, for two, am not sure Gullyble could even beat Ali in a fight today, and at least one of you is dead or not feeling well.

Despite all Gullyble's boastin' Ali is coastin'. So do not darken my doors again, especially as we are aiming for a lightish white/grey colour to match the windows and roof

Geoffrey
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Listen,
The stuff I put out are for me. If just one other person likes or gets something out of it that's great. That's rewarding but ultimately just putting one out is rewarding enough for me.
I can't write if I tried. Something quick or something thought long and hard on...working it out. Never worked for me. Quit embarrassing as well.
My stuff just comes to me and only comes if I work on me first. Taking care of me. Long hours of solitude in most of the aspects of my life.
And then it comes. Not often or regular but when it wants. In a moment and then it's gone again for a while.
So it's a gift from above to me. That's my reward and that's enough for me but not to share it wouldn't be right. It might bring someone a smile or lift their burden. They might not even feel alone. Who knows? I just write what I am told.

Now let's see that painting of Muhammad Ali you got?
I like Mike Tyson too
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Gullivor wrote: Fri Apr 14, 2017 5:31 pm Listen,
The stuff I put out are for me. If just one other person likes or gets something out of it that's great. That's rewarding but ultimately just putting one out is rewarding enough for me.
I can't write if I tried. Something quick or something thought long and hard on...working it out. Never worked for me. Quit embarrassing as well.
My stuff just comes to me and only comes if I work on me first. Taking care of me. Long hours of solitude in most of the aspects of my life.
And then it comes. Not often or regular but when it wants. In a moment and then it's gone again for a while.
So it's a gift from above to me. That's my reward and that's enough for me but not to share it wouldn't be right. It might bring someone a smile or lift their burden. They might not even feel alone. Who knows? I just write what I am told.

Now let's see that painting of Muhammad Ali you got?
I like Mike Tyson too

that's a nice reply, my crit. was harsh. apologies.
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